Oceanlab!
0:01 Explosive Intro, Well Made
0:28 You can add a little reeverb and delay (: but her voice will always sound sad.
1:22 Its up to you on how you want to make the melody. From arps, to solid saws blending with the Vocals.
ehh. Hey ferget what ppl say about your songs. Its your piece and you make it how you want to make it. I know its all competition here on NG but let me tell you what I do best to make music. Take your time and go over the song a few times. See if you can Nudge a little FX into it or maybe play with the melody a little. See if theres a better sound in your sound bank or VST's. Anything to make it sound good right?! (: I thnk you kinda rushed it but overall i say a good job cause I couldnt even remix a song by Oceanlab. Even if you supply me with her Vocals. Good Job man. Keep it up.